Re: New TF Story
 

Your story is absolutely amazing, i absolutely love mary's story, i even have a category on DA just for the story. I think the most amazing thing about stories is the in between; while im always impatiently waiting for the next part of the story, the imagination is left to its own devices. I love humoring the infinite possible continuations of the story.
for example i would love to see mary win, like her dream, take over the world. perhaps she could convince the body to keep the sentience of all humans, not only would everyone still be basically free, but they would be 'flesh' as well. or what if mary could use the flesh to expand her mental abilities, psionics and such; absolutely fascinating.
im glad i found this forum, i have been suffering for more Mary.
anyway you get the idea, freaking awesome story.

Re: New TF Story
 

Sorry I've been diverting so much attention to my other stories. I haven't forgotten about this one, I swear. ^^;
=================================
"So, what now?" Katie asked.
"What now is we wait," Mary said, folding her arms and looking at Shandra as she slowly deflated.
"Wait for what?" Katie asked.
"I dunno," Mary shrugged. "The police, the CDC... armageddon,"
Katie slugged Mary on the arm. "Something a litle more specific, please."
"Okay okay," Mary said, giving Katie a small push. "Either the detective gets the CDC or the CDC gets in touch. Either way, we get a little closer to what we- dammit, no!" Mary said, snapping her head to the side. She took a step and kicked her leg out, a wad of tentacles flying away from the leg of the table they were beginning to wrap around. Mary put two fingers to each of her temples and bent forward a bit, her face screwing up in concentration.
"...And I mean it, this time!" Mary called out to the room as she stood up. "I swear, like some kind of dumb puppy..." she said, shaking her head.
"Okay, first things first," Mary said, getting back to the conversation. "We've got water, still, assuming they keep it pumping, and what little electrical we need should hold for a while, but I'm going to need food soon. Lots of food."
""Didn't you just...?" Katie asked, pointing to the wall she'd walked out of the other day.
"Yeah, but that won't tide me over for that long, and the less I wait around for it, the more time I have to try and find a fix. I can probably raid the other apartment's fridges- might even make the Body happy to wait until some of it spoils, ugh- but eventually I'll need something else. You and Shandra have to eat, too."
"Well, with the police on the road, I don't think we can get any deliveries here..." Katie said.
"I can fly, but I don't know that I'd be able to go, get some food, and come back with it in any appreciable amounts," Mary added, hands on her hips.
"Wait, fly? You can fly?" Katie asked, eyes popping at Mary.
"Well, yeah, that's how I got to school the other day. Well, I guess you could say the Body can fly," Mary said, turning to meet Katie's look. "And believe me, you *don't* wanna see it. Thing was uuuuug-lee."
Katie snorted. "What, didn't have huge knockers like the rest of your transformatons?"
"Katie!" Mary squealed, clamping her arms over her chest, blushing if she'd had the blood to run into her cheeks. "It's not like I'm trying to do that!"
"You tell me with a straight face it was the Body's idea to give that big green behemoth triple-J's and I won't bring it up again," Katie continued, poking Mary playfully in the shoulder. Mary was literally shrinking away in embarassmnet, sinking down to her calves in the tentacle-mat.
"I- it- maybe I'm the first time the body's had a girl for a host, okay?" Mary sputtered. "Maybe that's just it's way of thinking 'girl'."
"Riiiight," Katie said, looking down at Mary.
"'M serious..." Mary offered weakly, looking at the floor and trying to suppress her embarrassment.
"Sure, sure," Katie said, going over and sitting on the makeshift coffee-table bed. "But if I wake up one of these days and see boobzilla mark two running around here, I'll know you're a closet case."
Mary melted most of the rest of the way into the floor, only the top of her head peeking over it like she was barely breaking water in a swimming pool. "Oh, hush..." She said, turning away as Katie laughed at her.
"Hey, wait a sec..." Katie said, snapping her fingers. "That's it!"
"What? What's it?" Mary said, turning her head back and rising up out of the floor a bit.
"Dig!" Katie said. "You said you could eat dirt for all the body cared. Why not just dig your way to the corner store or something? It's just down the street."
"Oh, c'mon," Mary said, rising out of the floor enough to rest her elbows on it, her head in her hands. "That's..."
"Your best bet," Katie said, folding one leg over the other. "Think about it. How many different animal and plant species could you find in there? The spice aisle alone is probably enough plant species to keep it placated for weeks."
Mary blinked. That could maybe work, come to think. The Body's hunger was one thing, but it's need to assimilate new genetic sequences was the real problem. Maybe she could string it along long enough to keep its growth at a managable-enough level until the CDC figured something out...
"You think?" Mary asked, rising enough to put her head in her hands, elbows resting on the floor. "But what about the sewer lines and everything? isn't the neighborhood's fiber-optic line buried around here somewhere, too?"
"Weren't you just making a big fuss over how you could have your little army of squirmers not eat certain things?" Katie asked.
"Well, yeah, but I knew about where it was and what I was looking for," Mary said, scratching her scalp under her tentacle-dreadlocks, "I think by the time I realized I was eating a sewer main... brrr," She said, shuddering at the thought.
"Well, then can't you just go slow?" Katie asked. "I mean, c'mon, it took the little buggers a little while to get through drywall, surely if you were paying attention and taking things slowly you could tell when you'd gone from dirt to metal and stop before you ate through it."
"Taking things slowly?" Mary echoed, fidgeting into her toga as she more fully re-formed. "Even going straight underground it's over a quarter of a mile to the store."
"And what, you've got a hot date?" Katie asked, spreading her hands. "Hell, I'd offer to help you dig, if only to stave off cabin fever. You've pretty much locked the three of us in here until this thing is over."
Mary stood for a moment, contemplating. It's not like she had much of a choice; even if she could covertly feed the Body through sneaking trips to the river and whatnot, Katie and Shandra still needed to eat. Well, at least Katie did; Mary was content with having Shandra dispose of Katie's milk, even in spite of- maybe even because of, she thought- how distasteful Shandra found the act.
"Well... Okay, then, I guess I'll start digging where the fridge used to be," Mary said, turning to look at where the kitchen once stood. "But I'm gonna be taking it pretty slow," She cautioned, "because even if the body could digest it okay, I do *not* want the apartment smelling like... *That* if I break a pipe," She finished, blanching again.
"Hey, be as careful as you need," Katie said, shrugging. "It's your dinner you're digging for, after all."

Re: New TF Story
 

Wow, first post here. Normally I just lurk, but this story is so good I had to drop a good job and encouragement of continuation. Looking forward to seeing how this goes.

-Raleigh

Re: New TF Story
 

and this happens only a few days after I re-read the start of the story where she assimilates the repair guy.

co-incidence? I THINK NOT :D

Re: New TF Story
 

I had this page bookmarked and would check back periodically, I'm glad to finally see something new here. Glad you haven't forgotten.

Re: New TF Story
 

Good times, good times.

Re: New TF Story
 

Nice story, sorry I didn't realise it till now. I like how the conflict with Mary vs the body is going. It seems to be good mix with Katie helping to keep Mary grounded and thinking straight.

Just reading you story and thinking, the body keeps going on about predators like it once ran into something dangerous or just remembers.

Maybe for the future Mary could run into something that is the Body's natural enemy. Thinking of the Body reminded me of Parasite X from Metroid and how the Metroid were the only thing that could keep them check as they where the only things immune to the Parasite and could eat them.

You could do something like that where the natural enemy to the body is just as bad as the parasite itself.

Just some ideas for you ponder, otherwise great story and I hope you keep writing.

Re: New TF Story
 

Hey there Orange! I finally figured out how to navigate the forum (I'm not that bright I know) Now I get to finally give comments on the rest of your stories! Although it feels weird writing them like this when everything is here already lol. Oh well, I'll just comment as I finish each chapter.

So I just read chapter 10 (I think). The question that's probably going to go through my head as I read the rest of the chapters until it's answer is "how long until the army shows up?" Anyway, my biggest surprise is what happened to Mary after the last chapter. I honestly thought that she was going to barricade herself in the apartment with the car. Didn't think that she'd EAT the car and everything else. What's more, she started forgetting what she looked like? I can't even begin to say how bad a sign that is. And though her plan to make the police flee without hurting anyone worked, either way the army is bound to show up at some point.

One has to wonder how long Katie will stick with Mary. More importantly, how will this all end for Mary? In a test tube? 6 feet under? (Wait, that'd be bad). A happy ending doesn't appear to be in site right now.

Great chapter! Can't wait to read the rest!

Re: New TF Story
 

So I just read chapter 11 of Mary's Story!

Not much to say about this chapter. I'm not the best at painting a clear picture in my head sometimes, even when given every last detail, but the forms Mary takes are really wild and otherworldly. I guess it's really hard to imagine what she's going through without having to go through it yourself. Like how Edward Elric described going through the door of truth in FMA (though I don't know if you know that reference ^^;). But thinking back to all the forms Mary takes, I feel that she still kinda likes what's she's become, if only a little. If it wasn't for the other being taking control of her whenever it wants and threatening to devour all life on the planet, I'm sure that she'd love what she's become.

Loved the end of the chapter. Some people can't take a hint until it's completely spelled out for them. Just a bit of a "Haha, serves you right" feeling.

On to the next chapter!!

Re: New TF Story
 

And there's chapter 12! Wow, didn't realize that you were trying to add as much transformation and expansion as you could with this one lol.

I imagined Mr T for some reason when Mary turned into a guy lol. And when Katie slugged Mary, I had a sense of Deja Vu. Little story, one time I asked a few guys to smack me for saying something stupid. The first few refused but the last one did. But the way he did it is was what shocked me. I remember the dialogue go like this:

Me: Please smack me!
Boy: Really?
Me: Really?
Boy: Really?
Me: Really?
Boy: Really?
Me: Re- *Thwap!*

I was like he did a quick draw with his hand on my cheek from out of his pocket. Never saw it coming. My friend said that he literally saw my cheek jiggle XD.

Anyway, what surprised me was the Body's response to Shandra's request and what really scared me was it's reaction to Katie's punch. I feel that the trigger that pushes Mary off the deep end will be whatever the Body does to hurt Katie in a way that can't be taken back.

Still reading with great interest!!

Re: New TF Story
 

Chapter 13 and on a roll!!

I chuckled a bit with the "Have a nice day," that the phone operator robotically said. Who calls the CDC if they're having a nice day? And the person who said "I can't have the place quarantined unless-" Unless what, people die? A little late for that don't ya think?

I really feel for Mary though. The CDC is pretty much her last hope. Otherwise it's either off to Area 51 in a test tube or The end of the Body, the Flesh, and her.

On to the next one!

Re: New TF Story
 

Huh, didn't realize that it'd been well over a year since you lasted updated Mary's Story. Well I can't say much because not a lot has happened, but one thing that I did enjoy was the lighten mood. Can't be serious all the time right? Really loved the cracks about boobzilla mark 2. XD

Can't wait till the next chapter of this comes out. I'm going to hunt for Working Girl and Sid and the Girls and any other stories. Not the best at searching through forums and they're not exactly storied titled here. Actually found a thread post started by someone else about Juggalos. I won't delve deeply into that. I'll just enjoy the story and say what I think.

Now then, come along Wattson! We'll hunt those stories down!