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Here's another one for everyone! This time it's two archaeologist girls who stumble upon some odd artifacts and transform. It's a sabertooth tiger and a dinosaur this time. There is some multiple breast action, as well as a little lactation. I'd really like to hear everyone's comments on this one, as I'm not too sure that I did justice to the dino girl's tf. Please let me know what you guys think.

As always, suggestions and feedback are much appreciated, good or bad. And in the mean time, enjoy!

Re: My short stories - transformation
 

You could try making ordinary people get transformed by no believable reason at all, that was what I tried with Nail, I mean...hurting the little finger with a train door?. No cult, no strange artifact, not doing something wrong... it just happened^^

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I hear ya, and that's what I did with my first two stories, the gargoyle one and the cat one, but some people complained about it, and I started doing triggers. I don't really like trying to come up with some convoluted reason for a person to transform, but I do like fleshing out the story just a bit, giving it some kind of setting.

I don't know, it certainly is easier to just dive into the tf. Just maybe not as satisfying.

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Well, is just that the "Reasons" are so overused... I want stories with a twist. I remember that as a kid, some kids used to say that if you spend to much time in the sea water you could become a fish, or that if you wasted to much time playing with your dog you could become one, that kind of stuff. They are stupid reasons but I liked those...

Another one! Centaur this time
 

Here's another one. I did a centaur TF this time. I've been wanting to do one for awhile, but I found it to be a real challenge. Centaur's are amazingly graceful-looking creatures, but it was pretty difficult to describe the change well. I think it's easy to picture, but it was hard to describe in writing. Let me know what you guys think about it, whether I got it or not.

I also kinda rushed this one a bit. I wanted to get something up here for people, and I didn't flesh this one out as much as I would have liked to. I used a pretty cheesy trigger, and I did a really shitty job on the ending. I was just going through it quick. I also wanted to do one where the subject welcomed the transformation from the very beginning, but couldn't really make it believable. Hopefully it doesn't ruin the story for anyone. Let me know what you think!

The next one I do will probably be the one that TF-Viewer suggested, about a mouse and snake TF together. It'll be difficult for me, and I'm gonna have to work it out in my head before I start writing. I'll get something figured out though, and I'll take my time on that one. I want to do it right.

As always, I like hearing from people, and I'd love to know what you guys think about this one. Criticism is always appreciated! Enjoy!

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I think the new one is great. That's the first centaur story I've read in a long time, and certainly none of the ones I have read previously ever explored that particular aspect of becoming a centaur (losing the ability to reach something so important that is). I liked it very much. :)

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I've been wanting to do a centaur for a long time. I'm not entirely sure that I like the way this one came out, overall, but I think it's ok. Thanks for the vote of confidence, though. I just found it very hard to describe what this transformation might look like. It didn't really come to me as easily as some of the others. I felt the same way about the dino tf.

Either way, thanks, and I'm glad you enjoyed it!

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Well, here's my next one. Sorry it took so long to get done, but I've just had no time at all to do these. It's also not as good as some of my others, I don't think. One, because I've been out of it for awhile and I think I'm a little rusty, and two, because I tried a completely different viewpoint than usual. Hopefully you'll like it, but some of you may not. As always, I'd love to hear any feedback you guys have, good or bad!

It's a Kangaroo tf. I took one of the suggestions and went with it. A couple on their honeymoon in Australia visit Ayers Rock and decide, unwisely, to enter a cave full of paintings. They see one of a girl slowly becoming a kangaroo and think nothing of it. The Aborigines force them into the cave, and they end up on top of the rock, where the girl tf's right in front of the guy. It was kind of awkward to write from a first person viewpoint, but I think I can get better at it if I practice some more. Let me know what you all think!

Enjoy!

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Oh wow, that Kangaroo TF was a great one and almost my kind of TF. The only thing I was slightly dissappointed in was that I never knew if her head changed too. Other than that complaint it was great, awesome job. :)

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I enjoyed the story.

But, I feel compelled to say this about it:

There is one thing about the story I didn't like. I believe you may have overused the word "babe".

That's all. :p

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*hangs head* sigh...I know I overused it. I just thought it would sound weird for her to be calling out the guys name, though I suppose it might fit alright. Either way, I think I may have done that simply because it's the way my girlfriend and I talk to each other. If anyone has seen the Scrubs episode where Turk has to read his vows to Carla and he says "Baby, you know you my baby. And yeah, there were other babies before you, but baby: you'll always be my baby, baby." you'll know how I felt while I was writing this.

But thanks, TF-Viewer, for pointing that out. I was really hoping no one would notice, but you've exposed me to the world now. ...sigh...

Still, glad to hear you guys liked it! I was going to put something in there about her face changing a bit, but I kinda got sidetracked. It was really difficult to write from that perspective! But I'll get better as I go, hopefully.

Thanks for the compliments! I appreciate the feedback!

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Well you could've at least mentioned that she has a muzzle at the end of the story in the "Laying there" part as in "I stare into her face which was now with a pointed muzzle with a black nose in the end as we were 'looking at each other, at a loss for what to do next...' " or somehting like that. But at least you said that she does have a muzzle, so that's all right. :)