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nooneinparticular0 03-21-2020 09:17 PM
Working on a BE Visual Novel, would like Feedback
 
So I tried my hand at creating a BE Visual Novel
here is my super rudimentary try:
PC Version: https://mega.nz/#!aYMhUYLa!ulA8_xzVk...Nt-jM7mhVQIHwU
Mac Version: https://mega.nz/#!yYFzFApR!alqECYzTp...Mt2Y2PYJxmLj6s

Abazaba 03-24-2020 01:37 AM
Re: Working on a BE Visual Novel, would like Feedback
 
Maybe it is just my setup but the default volume is a bit loud. That said it looks fine for what is there. Then again the poser style comics is not my bag so I am not the best to judge the art/style. Might be a good idea to post your story/outline for it to see what people might say/add. Tho it seems to run well enough on my PC, but maybe a slider for the skip might also be helpful as it seems to go a bit too fast(for me at least). Also maybe a end card since it is a work in progress, and the abrupt end was a tad off putting. For a second I thought the game broke and reset. I am assuming the save functions are for a later time when there will be choices and a branching story? Possibly a unlocking art gallery for the process bits as you unlock them? Those things said it is a good start.

nooneinparticular0 03-24-2020 07:24 AM
Re: Working on a BE Visual Novel, would like Feedback
 
Quote:
Originally Posted by Abazaba (Post 835413)
Maybe it is just my setup but the default volume is a bit loud. That said it looks fine for what is there. Then again the poser style comics is not my bag so I am not the best to judge the art/style. Might be a good idea to post your story/outline for it to see what people might say/add. Tho it seems to run well enough on my PC, but maybe a slider for the skip might also be helpful as it seems to go a bit too fast(for me at least). Also maybe a end card since it is a work in progress, and the abrupt end was a tad off putting. For a second I thought the game broke and reset. I am assuming the save functions are for a later time when there will be choices and a branching story? Possibly a unlocking art gallery for the process bits as you unlock them? Those things said it is a good start.
Oh no, all of that is coming, I'm working on adding that stuff. What I have now is the barest of the bare bones. I do think an art gallery is a good idea, and while I don't think I'll do branching paths, I think I'll have the player able to switch from character to character.

I'm also thinking about starting a small patreon to help continue this work.

laxu 03-26-2020 06:55 PM
Re: Working on a BE Visual Novel, would like Feedback
 
Hey I liked it!
The writing could use a little streamlining but what's there is fun!
You should put it on F95zone and/or TFgamesite if you want more people to see it

nooneinparticular0 03-27-2020 08:08 AM
Re: Working on a BE Visual Novel, would like Feedback
 
Quote:
Originally Posted by laxu (Post 835506)
Hey I liked it!
The writing could use a little streamlining but what's there is fun!
You should put it on F95zone and/or TFgamesite if you want more people to see it
I really want to, but I don't see the option open for me on either website. I think I don't have enough forum posts yet! Although I did it on the development forum and breast expansion thread on those websites.

ragnarok385 04-05-2020 06:59 AM
Re: Working on a BE Visual Novel, would like Feedback
 
It's definitely a good start. A little touch up on the sound and the text alternating between capital and lowercase letters wouldn't go amiss. Really like the premise and looking forward to more.


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