Amahain's Stories
 

Last year, I wrote this:

http://www.process-productions.com/f...ad.php?t=10538

A few months after posting that, I've been starting stories and scrapping them, never quite satisfied with how they turned out. Then I quit trying because writing is a time sink and I have other things to do.

But now I'm in the mood again. This will be the thread where I upload any new story for now on.

For now, I'd like to share a work in progress. It's going to be one of those never-ending x-rated stories where woman after woman turn into various kinds of demons. Naturally, constructive criticism is welcome, but I'm also looking for ideas. Aside from succubi and hellhounds, what other sorts of demons would make for good tfs?

On another note, are Word documents okay with everyone? I don't mind reformatting the stories if you have trouble opening them, but I won't bother if there's no problem.

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Loved the story! I really liked the female hell hounds would love to see more!

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Very nice, infectious demonic corruption is awesome.

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Stuff like this makes me think we should have a writing section of the site or forum, just archive some user stories here. I remember some things that I only saw posted on here that I dont have any recollection of other than their being good.

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Thanks for the feedback so far, everyone.

To expand on that, it would be nice if there were a place for all original contributions - written or drawn - which can't be found elsewhere on the net. It could be a subforum, or even just a sticky in this forum (though a table of contents would be necessary in the first post).

Anyway, just a passing thought.

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I missed you so much!

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My favorite kind! :)

Maybe I'm just over-saturated, but it seems like every succubus transformation has the same sequence of events: horns to finger talons to wings to tail with skin color change tossed somewhere in there most of the time and cloven feet rarely showing up around the same time as the tail. Regardless I'm really looking forward to future developments.

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Thanks!

There might be two factors at work, here. Firstly, it's customary for tfs to start with subtle changes and finish off with significant ones. The order you mentioned is more or less intuitive.

The second factor, I suspect, is that writers unintentionally plagiarise. When I was trying to figure out how a succubus transformation would progress, my mental model was based on what I've read in other stories. I'm hoping to avoid doing that in the future by having characters transform into other types of demons.

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Again, if anyone can think of a cool looking demon, provide a detailed description or an illustration. I'll try to have a character turn into one of them as long as it's in line with my aesthetic tastes (as a general rule, it should be a "dangerous creature" and there should be no TG involved).

Also, any other suggestions about where to take the story are welcome. I have a general plot, but I need to fill in some details. Once the demonic infection spreads from the apartment building, where does it go to next? Who gets infected? A nun? A police officer? A biker chick?

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New story: "Heat in Heat". It has nothing to do with my Inanna's Demons story, but I thought I'd post it anyway.

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The new story is very nice, I like it a lot.

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I liked it. The talking heads parts dragged a bit, but aside from that I enjoyed it.

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Thanks for the comment, and I'll keep that in mind for future stories.

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Here's another! "Bloodlust in Gotham" (See the edited first post).

It's another one that I've been sitting on for a while. I was feeling a bit embarrassed about posting it since it's basically fan fiction with a fetishistic twist. Oh well!

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Now that you mention it, I think most TF works are exactly that.

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I suppose.

The funny thing is I normally can't stand fan fiction, but my love of TF stories overrides my natural aversion to it.

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I feel the same way.

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I think it's because fan fiction falls into one of three categories: sexual fetishism, wish fulfilment, and original work. The fetishism is there because human sexuality is a freakish little midgit that's always hiding behind some furnature and saying 'Dude, what if octopussy was a literal name? Huh? Huh?'. You can't understand him, you just have to learn how to live with him and clean out his litter bin from time to time.

The wish fulfilment is basically the same time, except it's the author that's enjoying everything. They're masturbating onto the screen and expecting you to watch. The last kind, original work, is fairly rare since most of the people with the talent to write good fiction are smart enough to take their scenario and just create original characters for it so that they own, and can sell, the entire work.

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The mental imagery I got from your description of the human sexuality midget was priceless. Such an adorable little freak hiding behind the couch, coming up with ridiculous porn ideas. :)

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I liked the first story the most. It has lots of potential for sequels too *hint hint*

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First story was good, but the second story kinda fell flat for me. I dunno, it seems that having the heroine automatically be submissive to the villain, and seem pretty much 'drugged' at the end fell flat. It turned the whole thing into a shaggy dog story. Plus, having connor get killed off-screen...*sighs*. You pretty much turned being a werewolf into 'person has lost all mind/personality'. The story builds her up quite a bit, only for a character who's not on screen much to be victorious. Her lack of, well, character in the last scene really kills a lot of potential, and causes the ending to fall flat. (She's a cop! She saves lives. Now, she has no problem with being a mindless killer because she gets snu-snu.)

Bloodlust in Gotham is good, but I wonder how Batgirl plans to deal with it...she's a very competant, powerful woman, and it would be a shame for her to end up like Laura.

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Thanks, Mitchell. I didn't really like the conclusion of the cop story either, admitedly. I really only put it in there because I don't like ending a story with "and then she ran off into the night" or something to that effect.

Just to clarify, though, there was supposed to be a mental change at the end of that story - she didn't just decide to trade in her moral principles for sex. Rather, her moral principles evaporated after her first transformation.

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Which I dislike, finding it a bit...cheap. It would have been more reasonable if, at the least, she was capable of understanding her new lack of inhibition. Instead, she's just kinda, well, out of it.

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Ah, I see what you mean. Fair enough, then.

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If you're dissatisfied, why not rewrite it? I'm working as a prereader for Nekollx on Deviantart, and did some work for Wraith on his Legion book. I could help.

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I'll consider it. I'm working on some other things right now, but I wouldn't mind making improvements to it some time in the future. I'll PM you before I repost it, if I repost it. Thanks!

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I don't know if this would be kind of inappropriate, but I was thinking about the ending of the werewolf story and had an idea for a continuation of it. Would you mind terribly if I wrote it?

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I was actually thinking of changing it completely, but if you think you can improve the story by tacking a bit more onto the end, then I'm all for it.

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Next two chapters of Inanna's Demons are up. I'll be away this weekend, so I won't be responding to any comments until Monday - I'm not ignoring anybody.

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And they're good!

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I liked the new chapters. Especially the part where she tried to just remember her name but ultimately still got taken over completely.

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Thank you both!

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I liked the new stories! I look forward to seeing other kinds of demon monsters! What about some reptile or insect monsters?

Keep up the good work! There seems to be a shortage of good TF fiction lately...

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Reptile or insect monsters, eh? Sounds good. I'll keep those in mind.

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The new chapters got a nice story twist. I like that you introduced some adversaries for Innana's crew, that offers the story more possibilites
than being just a TF fest. ( Not that there is something wrong with a traditional, nice TF fest :p )
If you want a suggestion for some new forms of TF, i think goats would
fit very nicely. they're pretty traditional, if you want to show some bestial
sexual urges.;)

Anyway, a nice series. I'm looking forward to the next part.

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*shivers* No goats please, CYOC has turned me off of those FOREVER!

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:confused:

something tells me i don't want to dig further into the matter. :p
Thankfully i'm not all too familiar with CYOC's various literary outpourings...

I just thought of it as an idea, based on those ancient images of goatish demons and fiends.
Well, its Amahain's story, he should write it the way he prefers it, of course.

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I'm not really into goats, but I can think of a reasonable compromise: demonic satyresses!

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I love new content, and this was great--particularly the Inana's series. I'd love to see more!

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Well, that was in fact the image i had in mind. I was referring to goats just as the species the girls get mixed with. And since satyresses are in fact half woman half goat ( or the like ), i think we're talking the same here :D
I should have been more precise with the description of the idea.
But like i said before your story is really interesting, and I'm curious how you're going to continue it !

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Me too. I have a rough outline of a story, but for the most part I intend to wing it based on suggestions in this thread.

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Well, just as a matter of personal preference, I do like a good snake TF. :) Just putting that out there.

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If by snake, you mean snake-ish sort of demon, then the thought has already crossed my mind. I'll get to that eventually.

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Oh wow this is creepy... your username is almost the same as my last name. Mahan.

Infact my Steam username is actually Animahan O_o

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Sounds good to me.

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I can handle Demonic Satyresses...as long as it doesn't involve pages and pages of angst on being turned into an beast of burden, destined to live eternity as eating and sleeping and screwing, oh what tragedy, oh what horror, oh what purple prose!

...Like I said. Bad memories.

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Since I have no aspirations of becoming an Internet celebrity, you can probably rest assured that people won't be bugging you in game, asking if you write bizarre fetishistic fiction as a hobby.

Okay, onto Plan B, then.

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Demon nagas ftw!

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Update!

I know, I write at a pace that's best measured within a geological time scale. Still, better late than never.

I've edited the first post of this thread in order to add four new stories. I know that people have preferences when it comes to TFs in terms of species, sexual content, and other details, so I'll just summarize the stories here:

1. Inanna's Demons, chapters 5 and 6: Sexually explicit story involving satyress and insect-demon transformations. Contains lesbians.

2. Legacy of the Shadow Dragons: Sexually explicit story involving dragon tfs, evil conversion, and lesbians.

3. What Comes in the Dark: Sexually explicit story with alien TFs. Just as a warning, there's a bit of skin rippage in this. Also, the aliens are all lesbians.

4. The Beast of Birchwood: This is a bit different from my usual fare. No evil conversions, no permanent transformations into man-eating monsters; just a wholesome upbeat story with a strong Christian message and... just kidding about that last bit - lesbian werewolves FTW!

(Yes, I can write stories that don't involve lesbians. I just don't want to.)

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And a damn nice update it is!

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Pardon, but is there an Inanna's demons part 2? I see 1 and 3-6, no 2.

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I've been submitting them two chapters at a time, so Part 1 includes Part 2 in it.

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*loves the updates, as Amahain already knows*

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holy hell, nice stories!

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Thanks!

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Holy hell where did all these god damned stories come from?

Looks like I have some reading material.

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Way to go Amahain! I don't know how I somehow missed this thread but its good to read the rest of your stuff.

Excellent stuff, you've got a clear style, good pacing, and a terrific description of TF processes. I haven't come across a lot of corruption themed TF writings so far you are leading the pack in my book!

I like the idea of mixing around the TF subject, I enjoy the classic succubi and werewolf stuff, but as those are so popular they are a little stale. You know what the outcome is going to be and the general path of the TF. The alien TF was very cool as I didn't know what to expect.

Looking forward to your next update!

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Just uploaded two more stories: the seventh and eighth chapter of Inanna's Demons and The Carrier, which is a sequel to What Comes in the Dark.

As some of you may have noticed by now, I have a Fur Affinity account. I know that some of you aren't particularly fond of that site, though, so I'll continue uploading my stories to the first post of this thread, as always.

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Two new stories for you guys; see the list of attachments on the first page of this thread.

The Shoot: Just a short werewolf story and a bit more light-hearted than my usual stuff.

Broken Sanctuary: I loved Diablo 2, and ever since I saw that concept art of Andariel in the game manual (here's a re-creation of that image) I was smitten. I'm rather surprised that nobody's done an Andariel based TF before (as far as I know) so here you go.

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Awesome update.

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Your latest stuff deserves a major complement and a bump. Broken Sanctuary was excellent!