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*sighs*
So much focus on words instead of polite commentary on the work. The comic is very poor. There's obvious enthusiasm, but two main things need significant work before it can really work.
The first is actually planning your comic so others can understand it. The style, format, use of word bubbles, organization is all over the place and not even consistent comic to comic. I'm used to reading them and I can't tell what's going on within any of the first ten outside of the beginning tg. Having an odd drawing style or changing coloring patterns is one thing, but if it is incredibly difficult to understand what's going on, few will be able to enjoy the work.
The second is the writing. Very few of the word bubbles come across as coherent. Even more, there's no real sense that there's an actual plan or story behind it. I know character A shrunk/tg'ed/be'd character B. From the others I read, I have no real idea what else is going on or even what's going on between them interacting following that. This is partially a side effect of the comic organization, but more that the writing seems to lack direction and many of the statements come across incoherently. I would guess from them that English is not your first language (and may even be a third or fourth).
If so (and even if not) I'd suggest finding someone to bounce your comic delivery off of before you draw them, to help a bit with thinking about how to communicate it effectively. A drawing where it is easy to understand what's going on is far more effective in a comic format. Obsfucated art belongs in a museum or coffee house, where folks will actually tolerate the effort of sitting there for ten minutes trying to figure out what the artist was trying to do.
Ten cents, take it for what you will and good luck with your strip.
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