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Vengeance1701 · 03-18-2008

Alright.....the good, the bad and the ugly.

Good? Process was like with the last one pretty well done.

The bad and the ugly? You really need someone to edit for you. The grammar was wrong and some elements defied internal believability.

IE: 1) a high school teacher is not likely to wave at her students, unless she was incredibly weird.

and

2) Beth started as a B, how could she grow TO a B?

Other than that, it sets up the main story fairly well.

03-18-2008	#3
Vengeance1701 Modest Moderator Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 3,998	Re: The Collection, The Beginning (Story) Alright.....the good, the bad and the ugly. Good? Process was like with the last one pretty well done. The bad and the ugly? You really need someone to edit for you. The grammar was wrong and some elements defied internal believability. IE: 1) a high school teacher is not likely to wave at her students, unless she was incredibly weird. and 2) Beth started as a B, how could she grow TO a B? Other than that, it sets up the main story fairly well. __________________ Meh. Cranky and old.