[Ninja In The Night]

I've been dealing with moving in real life, but I glance at the forums now and again for about 5 minutes. You've done a great deal with the story "TheShoeLace" and it's got great potential. Your writing style's only flaw is some slight grammar here and there, but otherwise, nothing that doesn't come with repeated writing and experience. The critique your looking for doesn't exist, because honestly, there's nothing to improve on.