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Originally Posted by Blooman
I don't know, the narration/dialog feels rather... forced and awkward, like this excerpt
It just doesn't... flow right.
And the character seem to lack their personality, Midna's supposed to be a snarky little bugger, just as one example. (though Illia really didn't have much of one to recall from twilight Princess.  ) |
I see what you mean, but parents and children have forced conversations like this in real life, you should mind.
... Did you beat Twilight Princess? By the end, she doesn't really have that personality.
I actually did my best with personalities, you know...
Anyway, today, I should be writing a new piece.