[klyphlord]

Thank you both for your input. I do have problems with editing, especially considering this is the type of stuff you don't want to print out on paper. For this reason most of what I proffread I do on the computer screen which fatigues my eyes after awhile. The next story I do might be a little simpler for the sake that I felt continuity became impossible with the amount of characters in the story. Again, thank you very much for your specific feedback.