[joeman]

Page 18 is up. This one gave me problems because my power keeps turning on and off.

Now then, a short rant for youkai22.
You forgot to mention that I got the size of the sun wrong. It takes up 99.8% of all the mass in this solar system after all. It should be much bigger. Her not being able to breathe is a problem, but also she would be absolutely devastated by all that nasty radiation in space. She would freeze over too. But, if science is correct, she would not have even made it to space. Her heart would eventually have not been powerful enough to circulate her blood, causing her to die before she was even close to heading into space. All her organs would not have supported their weight and would have burst or something. Her bones would crack and she would not be able to move.

I know of all these problems and I have ignored them. Why? Because this is fantasy, my dear youkai22. Things do not have to make sense or follow the rules of physics. And as it is a work of fiction, moreover a work of fantasy, it would be considered a faux-pas by any collage student to even think about critiquing the scientific fact of it all. Who honestly would read Tolkien's books and write a critique saying "Gandalf is impossible"?

Now I do not mind if I am critiqued, and I will be the first to admit that my work is not perfect in any way. I am just saying that you should critique the right types of things: the art, the plot, the pacing, etc, etc. That is alright. I think everyone can handle that. However it is kind of a jerk move to point out obvious (about as much as a jerk move as calling the guy out with a rant, but, meh). Suspend your disbelief and enjoy the show a little.