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Unread 01-16-2009   #5
Wussy
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Re: Story: Gamer Girl

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Originally Posted by Logan73 View Post
I always enjoy your work, wussy, and this is no exception. Having said that, I'm not really a fan of describing growth with a rapid succession of numbers. Sure a measurement now and then is great for reference, but too many and it starts to feel a little clinical and inorganic. However, the actual descriptions you wrote were very nice, particularly the parts referencing clothing.
I hope you'll keep writing and posting here!
Yeah, I was trying to convey the idea of her growing both steadily and rapidly. Normally I write growth scenes like that to be much more flowing (eg. As she ascended to 75', she felt her clothes tighten up further...), but I wanted to see how this would work.

Apparently not well.

No worries, though. Like I said, it was just an experiment. I'm sure I'll get it right one of these days.

That's everyone, for all the kind words.
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