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Originally Posted by youkai22
Hey, y'know, some couples are into different things: who am I to judge if some people use PEE's on one another.
Also, dayum, that video game just did a better job at pleasing that guy's wife than he could. Kind of sad, really.
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Well, only in a video game do you get to fire an energy beam that directly stimulates the pleasure centers of someone's brain!
The PEE thing was just a thought I was going through while thinking of different weapons. I picture the robot to be like something out of Mechwarrior, so while the weapon in Mechwarrior is a PPC (particle projection cannon), my own bastarized version of it became a PEW (pulsed energy weapon). That's kinda funny, but PEE (pulsed energy emitter) is funnier.
It's a stupid, corny joke but I like it.
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Originally Posted by Chameo
Hey wussy, i really enjoyed it, a very unique story all together. aside from a few grammer issues and one kinda confusing part, it was really tight.
When the robot died to her hands, it was a little confusing when u explained about how she came back with her endowments.
another thing is that when she is 1000 some feet tall, and you are describing her breasts as big as watermelons, I understand that that's proportionally, but its still kinda weird when i first read it.
really nice though.
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Tell me what my grammar issues are! I'm somewhat of a perfectionist when it comes to my work.
And yeah, it's a little off to describe them as watermelons, but then again, it would also be incorrect to call them "H-cups" either, since that would imply that they're only 8" long. The game's programmers didn't include blimps, or she might've had a more valid comparison.
I thought that this was fairly straightforward, but please tell me what threw you off about it and I'll try to do better in the future:
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Aaron sighed and selected the ?continue? option. At the mech customization screen he began to change his equipment when he heard Mei shouting, ?Oh, this is not fair! This sucks! Hurry up and get back out here already!?
He quickly finished making his choices and launched the robot out of the hangar. When it arrived at the city he could see why she was so upset. The entire city had been completely reset, with all of the buildings, cars, and people intact as if nothing had ever happened. Mei was even back to her ?normal? 50? height.
However, neither her clothes nor her body had changed, so she was still wearing the shiny silver bikini which barely covered her H-cup breasts. She was pouting, and every time she stomped her foot it sent her honeydew-sized breasts jiggling.
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