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Unread 04-28-2009   #20
Mitchell
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Re: Amahain's Stories

First story was good, but the second story kinda fell flat for me. I dunno, it seems that having the heroine automatically be submissive to the villain, and seem pretty much 'drugged' at the end fell flat. It turned the whole thing into a shaggy dog story. Plus, having connor get killed off-screen...*sighs*. You pretty much turned being a werewolf into 'person has lost all mind/personality'. The story builds her up quite a bit, only for a character who's not on screen much to be victorious. Her lack of, well, character in the last scene really kills a lot of potential, and causes the ending to fall flat. (She's a cop! She saves lives. Now, she has no problem with being a mindless killer because she gets snu-snu.)

Bloodlust in Gotham is good, but I wonder how Batgirl plans to deal with it...she's a very competant, powerful woman, and it would be a shame for her to end up like Laura.

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