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Unread 11-01-2009   #4
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Re: Another Quicky Story: The Curse

I think he's just commenting that your paragraphs are too long, not that they don't break up at all.

Also: pretty much every sentence is a run-on sentence. Slow down, spread out, and take a deep breath when you write/edit.
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