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Blood007 · 12-07-2009

I'm truly sorry I can't offer any constructive criticism, so instead I'll heap some positive feedback on. I'm not an English major, so I'll let SinisterTwin continue in his capacity as The Grammar Nazi.

You wrote an incredibly detailed and wonderfully narrated story. It balanced the storyline/background with the growth/sexual aspects so that one didn't overpower (forgive the pun) the other.

The only addition I might suggest would be some art commissions, maybe one per chapter. But it certainly wasn't necessary.

12-07-2009	#86
Blood007 Lurker Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 21	Re: Four Types of Reactions (Mini-GTS/Slow/18+) I'm truly sorry I can't offer any constructive criticism, so instead I'll heap some positive feedback on. I'm not an English major, so I'll let SinisterTwin continue in his capacity as The Grammar Nazi. You wrote an incredibly detailed and wonderfully narrated story. It balanced the storyline/background with the growth/sexual aspects so that one didn't overpower (forgive the pun) the other. The only addition I might suggest would be some art commissions, maybe one per chapter. But it certainly wasn't necessary.