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Originally Posted by Wussy
This whole exchange seems unnecessary. It sounds like you, the writer, are annoyed with women. If you cut it out, nothing changes in the story.
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I thought this section might be a sticking point with some readers. I included it for a couple reasons.
First, I was trying to 'show' the reader the type of personality that Candice has, to make her a more realistic character. I've mentioned her theatrical, 'actress' style, and this section tries to reinforce that. I could go on about what kind of 'person' she is, but that's not my style - I'd rather the reader figure it out for themselves.
Second, even if it DOES come off as kind of sexist...some girls do act that way sometimes. And given that Candice is doing this primarily to mess with Seth's head, I don't feel like it should be a problem.
Finally, during the editing/proof-reading phase of writing this story, my girlfriend - a known female - was amused by that part. For me, that was case closed.
By the way Wussy, I do appreciate all the effort you're putting into the 'constructive criticism.' This is the kind of thing I need to get better, and although it's been hard to take sometimes, you've made some good points.