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Unread 06-12-2010   #2
catfish27
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Re: Decided to do more short stories (

Looks like an good setup, and I'm interested to see where this goes. The one specific thing I'd suggest is losing the "Well of course, little did he know he would get his wish sooner than he thought..." line. I don't think you need to provide such a blatant hint; "I wish I could do real magic" seems like enough foreshadowing.
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