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Originally Posted by Ichigo3924
Well it was well written, and a good read, the thing I didn't like though was no description of the feelings of the change, espicially with the boobs, there was like no utterance of breasts, boobs, or tits at all in the story, but that was it, you have my criticism and that's what you wanted right? To basically improve your writing style by viewing critiques, so with that my duty is done, also again a good read, but you won't have to worry to much about competition on the forum, not many writers, you should see the "Succubuss vows" I think thats the best story I've found on this forum.
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That is a good point, thanks for pointing that out. I know I need to work on detailing the changes, so I'm glad you told me what I need to work on.
And I'll check out that story you mentioned.