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Originally Posted by cyero
Oh wow I haven't been on the site much and forgot what section this was in.
Now that I've actually READ Chapter 12...
First reaction:
BIG YOU DOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOUCHE
Next reaction: BIG YOU MAGNIFICENT BASTARD
That was just. Astoundingly written. I can't hope to compete.
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Heh. The penny was always Big's jackpot, a gift for the one waitress tht eventually completely astounded him even for Juggalos. He'd let them know, obviously, but with Maddi and Sheila he knew it'd help force Maddi's little charade into th light, solving two problems at once. Mr. Big is enigmatic and eccentric, but he's got a good heart all told.
Also, what did you guys think about Maddi and Sheila's fighting? I struggled a lot with it to make it seem like it all made sense, that is flowed well, etc. Did it come out okay? Did it sound like real people having a real argument and not just exposition?