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Unread 07-07-2011   #8
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Re: Growth of July - An all-day struggle

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Originally Posted by ShadowV1.1 View Post
Yeah. I'll admit I may have made her shoulders a little too wide, especially in the first panel. I'm glad you like the concept at least.
I think the shoulders are perfectly fine (not because I like wide shoulders, but because those shoulders are not wide period).
What could be improved are the limbs: they seem stuffed rather than fleshy, and they look like they have been 'attached' to the main body like she was a puppet. And her breasts are sagging :P

I also think that the colours choice is kind of odd. You have chosen a terse b&w comic-style with a realistic pitch-black starred sky, an electric blue background, and you had the last panel showing off real fireworks and a Office 97's Wordart-like multicoloured sign. It makes me think you could have looked for a better blending choice

I apologize if I sound overly critical, I liked the concept too, and I also loved her face in panels 1 and 4, very cute
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