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Originally Posted by Chaos Echo
As for the expansion itself, I know, I have issues drawing it out. I'm trying to work on making it more detailed.
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I'm not a prolific writer, I haven't made anything public in a few years. But if I may humbly suggest...
When I do BE, I feel that details make or break a story. The main reason being that the growth process is often more important than the end result, IMHO.
To help the reader visualize what I'm trying to describe, I often have my ladies grow out of their clothes. Simply trying to describe a growing breast is a little vague, but detailing how a blouse is hanging loose, how it's filling up, how it's tightening, how the buttons are flying of and how the blouse is ripping at the seams gives the reader a kind of reference for his imagination. It's easier to imagine a blouse at these various stages than the breasts responsible for it. It's the same reason why it's often helpful to compare breasts to fruits or sports balls - most of us have seen a watermellon, but very few can say the same for a breast that size.
I also find it useful to use the characters themselves to describe a scene. As the writer, that's part of your job, but the ladies can chime in too, expressing their surprise, fear, lust or appreciation for whatever's happening. It makes for a more interactive read than just going through one description after the other, and it makes the characters more
lively. That's something you did in chapter 3, when the Princess realize that her breasts are growing. She doesn't know how to react, but she's enjoying it. The way she express herself:
"Ruhtina, already hot and bothered, was having a hard time forming coherent sentences. ?Oh my! Oh?. Oh my! What did? what is? oh my?? Her own hands rushed to her breasts, affirming that they were indeed becoming more and more plump. ?Ooh... you? you have a spell to grow these? Is that what you were... ohhh? talking about with that otheoooohhhh mmyyyy??
...is pretty sweet and is definitely a technique which you should keep using.
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Originally Posted by Chaos Echo
And as for this one, I've got the next chapter completely planned out, and three more vaguely outlined.
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Good to hear. Can't wait.
