[sadmanofshadows]

Okay, First, Hahahahahaha over nine thousand.

anyway.

Ratio= it could use more expansion but if its a serious chapter i don't really expect much so it's fine as is. Though in chapters like this one i found the expansion a bit out of place haha not a bad thing, just out of place.
For descriptions, In this chapter at least, I kind of lost track of where she was size wise until she was big enough to take up most of the table.
It could just be me but details about milestones in growth would help i think...
and if any of my comments/critiques are confusing let me know and i'll try to explain better
Still, I liked this chapter!
I would like to know more about the Gatznian people now haha
like as a people... if you know what i mean?
anyway. Can't wait for the next chapter!!!
Woo!