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Originally Posted by DevonCory
I really like the last few chapters you've posted. They are quite good. That last one was pretty hot... and I really don't mind. 
The only thing though, is that it was a little hard to read IMHO. I had some difficulties trying to figure out what was what, and when was what. |
I had it so there were larger gaps between paragraphs that separated the time frames, but...
What could I do to make it clearer?