[Ran]

I hadn't really thought of bringing the barmaid back in. That's a pretty good idea. I originally planned for more bimbo-y goodness, but didn't want to confuse the narrative, particularly since it gets pretty cluttered after Steffi has her moment.

Out of curiosity, who do you class as the main character? The guy who is telling the story or the 'you' that is experiencing the tale? Steffi does get a lot of focus, but is more the object of the story than the subject. The woman from the start is actually the best developed character in my head, since she's a recurring character of mine but in this case is more a catalyst than a character.

I like to put stings in the tail of my story (and give the bimbos a terrifying weapon to accidentally misuse), I also like to write multiple endings allowing for branching sequels. If the guy with the joke gets off free, that sets up for more bimbo moments. Allowing the observer to walk off would be easily done and allows a more tied off ending. Optional ending section maybe? I wanted joke guy to be affable enough for you to listen, but blas? and foolish enough to deserve whatever happens to him.

Also, surely it works better as 'My bimbo has no brains'