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Originally Posted by godleydemon

I actually happen to agree with clickme. Moira is just.. wow.. the character seems genuine but it just gets to a point where its like.. wow. This Moira's a real b*tch lol. But I think what was pretty ingenious and you may not have intended it, but even though they had fallen out of being friends they had a plight to solve. The previous friends even though they were upset and envious of there old friend seen her in a situation that was caused in a way by all of there meddling. So together they were able to solve the problem and get what they wanted and now there closer than they ever were. Because they came together in a time of need.

Now don't get me wrong. Like my previous review on your deviant art, I thought the story was positively ingenious in some spots. But I really do agree with Clickme, I think you may have gone into the b*tch factor to much on Moira. You made her uncaring, unemphatic, ect. It was as if she had only became friends with the other girls to get at there breasts in the first place. It seems almost out of place. So I have some problems with the validity of Moira's character a bit I guess.

I think you and clickme are right. I didn't do enough to make Moira sympathetic, so no matter what any of the other characters do she still comes off as a rotten person. I wish I had done that better.