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sleeper248 · 01-07-2013

I attached easier to read PDF versions to my post.

Please review my scripts and let me know what you think. Be sure to mention which option you are writing about when reviewing my scripts that contain multiple options.

I removed the neBEulized that featured a ninja so I only have ten entries for this contest.

http://www.process-productions.com/f...0&postcount=16

Since I might have a tendency to be a little biased in reviews of my own scripts, I'll simply list them in a top-ten style in order of building excitment with #1 as the clip I would be most excited to see.

10. Seven Minutes In Heaven - Epic Fail
09. Plant Life
08. neBEulized
07. Bursting With Magic
06. Bath-Time Beasties
05. PARTY PREP
04. Succubus BE
03. DEEP BREATHS
02. Pressure Luck - Options B or C
01. Bubble Gum Vengeance

Following is my review of the other contestant's entries.

I've been told that I sometimes lack tact when communicating with others. If my words offend you, please note that it was not my intent to offend any of my fellow respected authors.

Title - Author - Review

Sweet revenge - Kong - This clip would appeal to the giantess/amazon community. If you are part of that community, definitely give this one a read. I like the BE part. Depending on how the fangs are done could make or break this clip. I'm just not into the giantess/amazon thing.

Werewolf Futa Transformation - Exiram Movies - Sorry, I'm just not into Futa or extremely hairy girls. Not enough detail for me to properly review.

Alyssa's Secret - mperone - One of the better warewolf TF scenes I've read. I like that the transformation is expected and the wolf has a purpose. Good detail in your writing. But, as I said before, I'm not into extremely hairy girls.

Party Preparations - Heliumpongo - I like this one. One point of confusion in the details. Did the inflation start out at just the breasts and then go to full body inflation or did it remain just the breasts throughout?

Quiet Time - BaronChimera - Creative. This would work as an episode of Twilight Zone or Tales from the Darkside. Sorry BaronChimera, it just doesn't have enough (any) of the processes that would interest me to buy it as a clip here.

Script! aka I Think We Found Happiness - Ballsdeep - I like this one. I only had two problems with the script. First, the mom mentions both animals and a brother. We neither see nor hear anything indicating their presence. Second, you had me until the girls took their clothes off. As a clip, I might buy this is one if it ended prior to the nudity.

kymanthropy - danielsangeo - From what I read it seems a Kymanthrope is similar to a lycanthrope, replacing the wolf with a balloon. The popping balloon "bites" the victim's cheek, turning the victim into an inflated kymanthrope at the next full moon, and alters their personality/voice. Where did you get the name Kymanthropy? I like how you covered different inflation aspects (BE, Belly, Butt) before finishing with full body.

BytorScript Idea2 Wonka's Revenge - Tekair - A good idea for a blueberry clip. I like that another character was present to tease the inflatee. As far as purchasing this as a clip, I would wait a while due to the other recent blueberry clips in the TMC store.

Sarah's Power - mperone - Well detailed. Good job. However, this clip wouldn't appeal to me. With all due respect, superhero TF and graphic masterbation scenes are just not among my preferences.

A berry bad batch - bubba7545 - This one is different enough to graby my attention. I like the popping at the end and the variation on the traditional blueberry inflation. The phone conversations were a nice touch.

The Three Wise Women - spzero - I like how you fit the three different expansions in one clip and tied it all together with the statues. I would consider getting this clip but it would not be my first pick from this contest.

WorldsBiggestBitch - spzero - Again, well done in fitting multiple inflations together in the story. I'm on the fence about this one as I am a fan of BE but don't care for the tall growth.

TMC Clip Script aka Blueberry Boobs - Slothed - Sorry, but for me, part of the blueberry thing is the imobilization because of how heavy they get with all that juice. Her walking around and out the door at the end kind of turns me off to this clip.

He had it coming aka Karma is a bitch - anonymous - Gender bending is not among my interests so I'll have to pass on this one.

Alien Futanari Impregnation - _R_ - Good detail and a bit graphic. I just don't like futa.

Perfume Transformation Script - DCMV - Seems like standard fare for a bimbo TF clip. I'm not a fan of the heavy makeup typically used in bimbo TF clips that usually makes the bimbo look kind of clownish rather than sexy.

Sleeping Pills Futanari - poppert56 - A well writen storyline. I like how you keep the audience guessing at the end. I am just not into futanari.

Breast Friends - Weirdoid - Male on male scenes hold no interest for me.

Forever Love - Weirdoid - A cautionary tale about making wishes. I like the detail you put into your script. However, I don't care for genderbending.

Special Jello - Laughingman - At least she didn't get "blueberry" gellatin. Not too graphic and she remained clothed. I really like this one, Laughingman, good job. Reminds me of my neBEulized script where she can't get to the phone.

Corporate Resizing_v1 - Nom Anor - I usually like more extreme inflations, but this is a nice story. May I suggest: she randomly hides in the managerial closet without realizing it and then after the change she remembers aloud about Natalie's outfit in the managerial closet and then looking around, "wait, this is the managerial closet" and gets the clothes.

Drink to Shrink_v3 - Nom Anor - The dialogue is good and the storyline solid. A good script overall. While I don't have anything against shrinking clips, they just don't interest me.

Little Mermaid_v1 - Nom Anor - While I am not into shrinking clips, this is an amusing little story. With a little further development this could eaisly pass as an episode of Twilight Zone. Welcome to the annual mermaid fishfry.

Pills - mysteryman29 - If you like animal TF, definitly check out this script and write a review. While a good script, it is not something I would personally be interested in seeing.

Juiced - Blackjack - Except for the second person being present, I really didn't read anything that would make this clip different enough from other blueberry inflation clips to interest me.

A Growing Career in Nursing - FeironLucs - If you like nurses growing through the ceiling and riping out of their clothes, give this one a review. It is a good clip for fans of this particular fetish category.
I do not happen to be one of those fans.

The Ultimate Vibrator - GenYun - As I've said before, I am really not into futa.

Exes and Ohs - Clovis - I like your preference for the actress to be clothed like maybe a t-shirt and shorts. Definitely one I would consider purchasing.

No Easy Way Out - Clovis - A nice alternate use for the blueberry suit. Would they have to paint the suit flesh colors or do you have an explaination in the storyline for the blue color of the suit?

What He's Missing_ - Clovis - This one is pretty good but I think your "Exes and Ohs" should be considered before this one.

Sammie Grows Out Of Detention - MeToo - I believe this is the only raging hulk growth clip in the contest. The idea is good with the principal doing random drug screenings and the friend texting her to get rid of her stash before going to see him/her. I'm not into the hulking growth clips but this is a good script for those who are into it.

I believe that is all the entries. Let me know if I missed yours.

01-07-2013	#8
sleeper248 Contributor Join Date: Dec 2012 Posts: 14	Re: TMC's Scripts To Clips Contest! I attached easier to read PDF versions to my post. Please review my scripts and let me know what you think. Be sure to mention which option you are writing about when reviewing my scripts that contain multiple options. I removed the neBEulized that featured a ninja so I only have ten entries for this contest. http://www.process-productions.com/f...0&postcount=16 Since I might have a tendency to be a little biased in reviews of my own scripts, I'll simply list them in a top-ten style in order of building excitment with #1 as the clip I would be most excited to see. 10. Seven Minutes In Heaven - Epic Fail 09. Plant Life 08. neBEulized 07. Bursting With Magic 06. Bath-Time Beasties 05. PARTY PREP 04. Succubus BE 03. DEEP BREATHS 02. Pressure Luck - Options B or C 01. Bubble Gum Vengeance Following is my review of the other contestant's entries. I've been told that I sometimes lack tact when communicating with others. If my words offend you, please note that it was not my intent to offend any of my fellow respected authors. Title - Author - Review Sweet revenge - Kong - This clip would appeal to the giantess/amazon community. If you are part of that community, definitely give this one a read. I like the BE part. Depending on how the fangs are done could make or break this clip. I'm just not into the giantess/amazon thing. Werewolf Futa Transformation - Exiram Movies - Sorry, I'm just not into Futa or extremely hairy girls. Not enough detail for me to properly review. Alyssa's Secret - mperone - One of the better warewolf TF scenes I've read. I like that the transformation is expected and the wolf has a purpose. Good detail in your writing. But, as I said before, I'm not into extremely hairy girls. Party Preparations - Heliumpongo - I like this one. One point of confusion in the details. Did the inflation start out at just the breasts and then go to full body inflation or did it remain just the breasts throughout? Quiet Time - BaronChimera - Creative. This would work as an episode of Twilight Zone or Tales from the Darkside. Sorry BaronChimera, it just doesn't have enough (any) of the processes that would interest me to buy it as a clip here. Script! aka I Think We Found Happiness - Ballsdeep - I like this one. I only had two problems with the script. First, the mom mentions both animals and a brother. We neither see nor hear anything indicating their presence. Second, you had me until the girls took their clothes off. As a clip, I might buy this is one if it ended prior to the nudity. kymanthropy - danielsangeo - From what I read it seems a Kymanthrope is similar to a lycanthrope, replacing the wolf with a balloon. The popping balloon "bites" the victim's cheek, turning the victim into an inflated kymanthrope at the next full moon, and alters their personality/voice. Where did you get the name Kymanthropy? I like how you covered different inflation aspects (BE, Belly, Butt) before finishing with full body. BytorScript Idea2 Wonka's Revenge - Tekair - A good idea for a blueberry clip. I like that another character was present to tease the inflatee. As far as purchasing this as a clip, I would wait a while due to the other recent blueberry clips in the TMC store. Sarah's Power - mperone - Well detailed. Good job. However, this clip wouldn't appeal to me. With all due respect, superhero TF and graphic masterbation scenes are just not among my preferences. A berry bad batch - bubba7545 - This one is different enough to graby my attention. I like the popping at the end and the variation on the traditional blueberry inflation. The phone conversations were a nice touch. The Three Wise Women - spzero - I like how you fit the three different expansions in one clip and tied it all together with the statues. I would consider getting this clip but it would not be my first pick from this contest. WorldsBiggestBitch - spzero - Again, well done in fitting multiple inflations together in the story. I'm on the fence about this one as I am a fan of BE but don't care for the tall growth. TMC Clip Script aka Blueberry Boobs - Slothed - Sorry, but for me, part of the blueberry thing is the imobilization because of how heavy they get with all that juice. Her walking around and out the door at the end kind of turns me off to this clip. He had it coming aka Karma is a bitch - anonymous - Gender bending is not among my interests so I'll have to pass on this one. Alien Futanari Impregnation - _R_ - Good detail and a bit graphic. I just don't like futa. Perfume Transformation Script - DCMV - Seems like standard fare for a bimbo TF clip. I'm not a fan of the heavy makeup typically used in bimbo TF clips that usually makes the bimbo look kind of clownish rather than sexy. Sleeping Pills Futanari - poppert56 - A well writen storyline. I like how you keep the audience guessing at the end. I am just not into futanari. Breast Friends - Weirdoid - Male on male scenes hold no interest for me. Forever Love - Weirdoid - A cautionary tale about making wishes. I like the detail you put into your script. However, I don't care for genderbending. Special Jello - Laughingman - At least she didn't get "blueberry" gellatin. Not too graphic and she remained clothed. I really like this one, Laughingman, good job. Reminds me of my neBEulized script where she can't get to the phone. Corporate Resizing_v1 - Nom Anor - I usually like more extreme inflations, but this is a nice story. May I suggest: she randomly hides in the managerial closet without realizing it and then after the change she remembers aloud about Natalie's outfit in the managerial closet and then looking around, "wait, this is the managerial closet" and gets the clothes. Drink to Shrink_v3 - Nom Anor - The dialogue is good and the storyline solid. A good script overall. While I don't have anything against shrinking clips, they just don't interest me. Little Mermaid_v1 - Nom Anor - While I am not into shrinking clips, this is an amusing little story. With a little further development this could eaisly pass as an episode of Twilight Zone. Welcome to the annual mermaid fishfry. Pills - mysteryman29 - If you like animal TF, definitly check out this script and write a review. While a good script, it is not something I would personally be interested in seeing. Juiced - Blackjack - Except for the second person being present, I really didn't read anything that would make this clip different enough from other blueberry inflation clips to interest me. A Growing Career in Nursing - FeironLucs - If you like nurses growing through the ceiling and riping out of their clothes, give this one a review. It is a good clip for fans of this particular fetish category. I do not happen to be one of those fans. The Ultimate Vibrator - GenYun - As I've said before, I am really not into futa. Exes and Ohs - Clovis - I like your preference for the actress to be clothed like maybe a t-shirt and shorts. Definitely one I would consider purchasing. No Easy Way Out - Clovis - A nice alternate use for the blueberry suit. Would they have to paint the suit flesh colors or do you have an explaination in the storyline for the blue color of the suit? What He's Missing_ - Clovis - This one is pretty good but I think your "Exes and Ohs" should be considered before this one. Sammie Grows Out Of Detention - MeToo - I believe this is the only raging hulk growth clip in the contest. The idea is good with the principal doing random drug screenings and the friend texting her to get rid of her stash before going to see him/her. I'm not into the hulking growth clips but this is a good script for those who are into it. I believe that is all the entries. Let me know if I missed yours.