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Originally Posted by Keile

The trip is scary mainly for the fact that it would be their first time leaving the country. ANY time you leave your native country and are in a new land it can be scary. Culture Shock is what I would call it, but if you notice I kept her quite calm about it all while he was worried. That is part of Chris that is from me: I am a worrier and I tend to overly worry about stupid shit XD

Oh yeah, I completely felt that she had the more reasonable response by far. It was Chris that was throwing me off. I think that his objections could've been stronger and less confusing by pointing out the stuff that is of legitimate concern. ("Don't let them mess with your laptop, I heard they install spy programs" "If you get accused of a crime, even if you're innocent, you might not make it home", etc)

Good point, Ill keep that in mind. The way I had envisioned it was kind of a mix of the two. He was going between relaxed look and fidgeting while going more towards leaning over the table. I have a attendance to imagine the situation in my head vividly and realistically...however sometimes I have an issue converting those images into the proper wording.

I totally understand. When a scene is confusing for me, I'll try to act it out in real life to get a better feel for it. But as it's written, he leans back, relaxes, then starts getting agitated.

Oh and it's not the straight guy who wants to fuck the super hot girl. It's the other way around, but she is in conflict with her sexuality and her desire to make her best friend happy. She wants to be able to LOVE Chris as a partner rather than a friend.

OK, fair enough. I just assumed this based on his reaction to her ass wiggle, but you know what they say about making an assumption. "You make an ass out of you and umption."

Also: I appreciate the feedback, actually. I was quite HOPING you would be one of the ones to review it as you have been one of the major writers in the forum in the past.

Well thanks for the kind words! I appreciate that you took the feedback in the spirit it was given in. I really do.

Originally Posted by Keile

Chapter 2
Kaila boarded her plane without much incident. It was a full flight, but she had managed to get a great deal on first class.

I want to know her travel agent, because first class is hideously expensive. I've had reason to look into this, and a $1,000 flight in economy becomes $4,000 for business class, and $10,000 for first class. I'm not saying that it doesn't happen (if you volunteer to bump yourself from a full flight, the airline will often upgrade you on your next trip) but saving even 20% would still leave it very, very expensive.

Many hours, and plane changes, later she arrived at her destination. Beijing was the closest place that she could fly into, but the trip to the small village would take several hours of driving, but first she would have to find the rest of her classmates.

While it's true that it's at least a 15 hour flight from the states, there should've been at most one layover. Beijing is a major hub with hundreds of flights in and out daily. The only plane change would've been from <small airport> to <major airport>, such as Maine to New York, before taking a non-stop the rest of the way. (I've been doing a bit a travel recently)

This made Kaila extremely happy, as she had promised to bring Chris home a souvenir and this would give her a perfect opportunity. She decided that they should check into their hotel first, however. So the three of them made their way out of the airport and out into the fresh air of Bejing....

Haha, if she's expecting fresh air... oh man, is she in for a surprise.

Kaila said that it was a class trip, but there's only 5 students and 1 teacher going?

I like this chapter. Some good characterization via Chris's flashback, and Kaila's trip seems like it's going to be fun for her!