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Re: Golden Sequence (Story)
Pretty fantastic work.
Minor criticisms: I'll admit, I'm not an expert, but the idea of her screaming about her hair and other small details... just seemed a little odd to me. Maybe an alteration of wording would have helped, but... yeah... just a little thing like that adds and/or takes away from the story and experience.
Otherwise it's a solid, sexy, splendid work. Keep it up good sir.
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