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Re: Yard Work Part Two
The pacing of this is off in this version, not that it's a bad thing, and IMO should probably be addressed for us the reader.
Example, the sister gets sprayed like 4 times in the first couple of pages yet she doesn't seem to grow NEARLY as quickly in the second story as Nicole does. Now it can be argued that Nicole having been exposed to the water/older/different genes takes some time to mature. Which we see happening in the first story.
And not to give spoils but in her AR & AP sections it happens in minutes what took the Luke's sister like days and judging by how quickly she lost her curves I would have expected Luke to be smaller than her.
By the way I love the tie in to the Something in the Water.
So far I'd say this is the best comic I've purchased from you DT. Keep up the work and I'm hoping my questions are answered in the 3rd installment.
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