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Snotling
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Re: New story: Colonial cousins. (Growing Amazons, AP)

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Originally Posted by chorcen View Post
Looks like I will be first to write, who actually seen full thing.

PDF format is not a problem, you can always convert it to JPEGs, takes 2 minutes.

It's a big story - 190 pictures, the comics features Story telling more than growth of any kind just as Snootling says above, there isn't growth as such, except some aging up of the new generation. There are 3 male main characters and 9 female characters from the start, later on they get daughters and 1 son, which will star in follow up story. I was a bit sad when 2 of main characters died, although 1 of them was a prick and probably deserved it.

With regards how story is put together, all pictures are top notch quality, in some of the frames, Snotling tried to tell the story and it feels a little big overloaded with text, I actually admit, that I was lost where dialog starts and what is follow up as speech bubbles were position in different places. Perhaps in the future you can add little numbers or work on positioning a little better i.e first bubble starts from character, next phrase starts from the first speech bubble. It will be easier to follow up conversation in the frame if you must fit a lot of dialog in.
Thanks for the honest feedback.

bubbles are usually read left to right and going down but your suggestion of adding numbers is something I will seriously consider. Especially in those panels where it gets heavy. I've been working on this and I have fewer of them now than I did in the past, (remember Starship Bloopers?) but they still happen once in a while. Since "takes two to dance" I've introduced "sidebar dialogues" for those longer discussions that don't require their own panel (character just sitting and talking about stuff) and starting with Funky spice #15 I'm using "narrative panels" where the main character, in this case Jen, brings the reader up to speed with more information than a dialogue could. And obviously when a dialogue would not make sense.

I am committed to keep producing increasingly good quality stories to you guys and I've been working a lot on the image quality in the past few months. Now I need to go back to my storytelling techniques and perfect them some more. The sad thing is I have more Ideas than I have time to render, some of them are fap stories, most are not but almost all of them have some growth process, either AP or GTS. With or without BE or muscle.

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