[Kitran]

Your story looks like a game of Mad Libs gone horribly wrong. Every element seemed so generic and lacked character. First, as said before, the real world references were completely unneeded and distracted from the story. Could have easily said that they were moving up the coast or just watching a football game without needing to pull out unnecessary names like the teams or the names of military bases. It wasn't important to the story. Second, there wasn't any depth to the story. For example, there was no backstory as why there were giant reptiles or niguana (which I had to look up in the urban dictionary because this term was never explained in the story) at all. Even the paragraph structure wasn't great, but I can usually look past that if the story was decent, which in this case, it was not. Finally, the comment about this being a furry story kinda insults me, and I am a furry. This story didn't scream or even whisper 'furry' to me and the fact that you used that as an excuse to avoid criticism from your readers is rude and disrespectful both from a reader's aspect and a fellow author's aspect. The reason you decided to share this story was probably because you thought it was good and wanted to hear the opinions of your fellow forum mates. But you have to be respectful to all comments and critiques, be them positive or negative.