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Originally Posted by The AP Ninja
Thanks godleydemon good to hear that there are some good writers with my mother language out there....
BTW second part written in the first post, everyone
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Kind of strange for a story to fast forward 3 hours like that. But not to bad really. If you want, this would be a really great chance to go back through and flesh out some more of the story. Introduce more characters and conflicts. The transformations are pretty darn well laid out. But the story and characters are a little hard to get behind, because there isn't much there to them.