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Originally Posted by The AP Ninja
You are pretty much right...
This character didn't have much to tell about but I dont introduce her as I should... I didn't want to add much more plot to it because it was getting a bit long...and about the three hours I just wanted to make you see that she was so enchanted with her new body that she didn't even know how far she was going...in fact she doesn't even go back home...
But given that this perjuices the story rather than beneficiate it
I will probably check this story again and probably introduce more plot
Thanks for the opinion and the cheers
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Yeah no problem, I help out Max sometimes as well. Just offering advice and constructive crit on some of it. I think I even edited a couple of his stories as well. Can't wait to see some more of your writing and how much better you get
