[Ironhorse]

Well, the anatomy doesn't quite work that way. Your story also needs to show, more then tell us the appearance of the characters. You have, for example:

“Would you like some tea?” Mrs. Wells asked.
“Oh no,” Amy replied. “I’m actually kind of tired. I think I’ll call it a night.”
“Okay.”

But think of how it sounds when you write some descriptions:

"Would you like some tea?" Mrs. Wells asked kindly, offering a white china cup that smelled sweet, with a hint of fresh cut grass. Amy's mouth watered for a moment at the thought of eating grass, but she shook herself and discarded the silly thought.
“Oh no,” She replied. “I’m actually kind of tired. I think I’ll call it a night.”
“Okay.” Mrs. Wells smiled, calmly returning to the kitchen as Amy stood and stretched her sore arms and back. She'd been having trouble sleeping recently, and it was beginning to get to her.