Re: New EBook: "Scale Model"
Was there at any point a physical description of the character Paige? I mean, at least her height? The only thing I could tell you about the shoes were that they had chunky platforms, black, and with ankle straps, I think?
It seems like you emphasize the action of a scene over painting a picture with words in your writing. Objects are given very non-descript labels like redhead or child. Is it just me? I may be exagerrating but it can't be by that much..
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