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Originally Posted by cvb
Very nice, actually. Like, aside from liking it because it features my favorite thing (fuzzy ladies getting way fuzzier), there's actually a spark here. I'm curious about the characters and what happens next, which is not typical for the usual TF story. Aside from some of the technical stuff that came from writing this very rushed as you said, I felt you left some loose ends. What caused her to transform? Nerves? Excitement over Gabe? If it was meant to be mysterious, I thought it felt more just incomplete. I also thought the conversation between Nora in wolf form and Gabe was hard to follow. I assume Gabe was asking if she had ever killed a human before, but it wasn't obvious. I do appreciate how you tried to not spell everything out for the reader, but just a little more assistance would have been good. I also enjoyed the touch of humor from Gabe's point of view.
I definitely look forward to reading more from you, especially any continuance of this story.
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Thanks! Yeah, everything that I left open ended was more or less intentional, but it's a fine line between intentionally leaving it vague or open to interpretation and not having a real answer in mind. That's probably the thing that worried me the most about it. Nora's trigger was thinking about what had happened to her family. I always love it when a subject regularly transforms under expected conditions (like the full moon), but the change can also be spurred on by something else (attraction, fear, anger, libido, etc.). At the end I tried to have her speaking to Gabe about the attack kind've drop a hint about what caused the change, but I don't think I did a very good job with it. I think if I spent more time with it I could've had that be a bit more clear, but it did what it needed to do in that it makes me want to try to churn out something better next time. But if it ended with you wanting to learn more about what happens next then I'm pretty happy, as that was more or less what I wanted to go for.
I've had a number of people ask about a sequel (or assume that this is the first in a series). I don't plan to go any further with this storyline, but the general plot is something that kind've has a lot of meaning to me on a personal level and so I definitely will be rewriting it at some point. Probably not for a while. If I do write a sequel someday, it'll be called Colder or Cold 2: Judgment Day.
Next I plan to just hash out some TF and sex scenes. No real plot whatsoever, I just feel like I need to work on that for some another story I'm working on. I don't know if I'll post them anywhere, I'll probably just reuse them for actual stories somewhere down the line.
Anyway, thanks so much. At this point I really like hearing "I liked this and this, but this needed work." Let's me know where my strengths are and where I need to improve.