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Unread 07-27-2018   #10
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Re: Style Mistakes that Weaken TF stories

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Originally Posted by TF-Viewer View Post
"Your hand stretches into a paw. Your bones shift into a new shape."

That's 2nd person TF, the narrator is telling the reader that they are transforming. I've never liked it, and when I see the story starting out like that I Just immediately close the page and find something else to read. Not everyone with a TF fetish wants to be the subject of the TF themselves.
OH! yes yes! totally agree with this. This is a huge turn off for me on a story, as soon as I see it happening like that in a story, I'm done. Immediate close or refund of product.
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