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Mr Wayne · 12-10-2013

Qzar9999,

*Looks on with passive bravado. Then slips on a pair of sleek Terminator shades* B-)

Among a slew of pointers, I like how you don't portray every female victim to be afraid of the unstoppable process even though I'm more of a 'fear' fan. Mixing things up spreads out the ability of the story to appeal to a broader audience and keep things real.

"Ashley started to say something to her, but suddenly she felt a momentary dizziness, and then Kasey seemed to shrink back down a few inches..." Nice way to spin the start of Ashley's 'rise' to infamy by using the dizziness, then reversing the perspective briefly and saying that everyone else shrunk. Creative.

The other two segment parts should be interesting indeed.

**Sends wish list to Santa with the hope that the rest of this magnificent story be told, as intended, sometime in the near future** ^_^

12-10-2013	#76
Mr Wayne The Man~the Myth~the Bat Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Gotham Posts: 738	Re: Story: One Week at Wolf Lake (Growth, miniGTS, GTS, F/m, F/f, sex) Qzar9999, Looks on with passive bravado. Then slips on a pair of sleek Terminator shades B-) Among a slew of pointers, I like how you don't portray every female victim to be afraid of the unstoppable process even though I'm more of a 'fear' fan. Mixing things up spreads out the ability of the story to appeal to a broader audience and keep things real. "Ashley started to say something to her, but suddenly she felt a momentary dizziness, and then Kasey seemed to shrink back down a few inches..." Nice way to spin the start of Ashley's 'rise' to infamy by using the dizziness, then reversing the perspective briefly and saying that everyone else shrunk. Creative. The other two segment parts should be interesting indeed. Sends wish list to Santa with the hope that the rest of this magnificent story be told, as intended, sometime in the near future ^_^ __________________ The night is darkest just before the dawn... kArMa XD Last edited by Mr Wayne; 12-24-2013 at 07:10 PM. Reason: Oops...