It's possible that it slipped my mind a bit while writing this one. I'm usually a bit better at descriptions and stuff. I certainly feel like I did a fairly good job of it in Interview, for instance.
Truth be told, it took me a very long time to actually finish this one; I kept picking it up, writing a little bit, and putting it back down. I don't think I was bringing my "A" game, for whatever reason. It's entirely possible that details I'd usually cover may have escaped my notice. Don't get me wrong, I don't think it's
bad or I wouldn't have released it. I just feel like I've done better.
As for the nondescript labels...that was on purpose, because I figured most people reading this story wouldn't care very much about what the gallery patrons looked like, ya know? lol
EDIT: Having gone back over the story...
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She flicked her eyes up and down Paige’s body, taking in the chunky platform heels, the sheer black hosiery and garters, the tight black miniskirt, the black-and-silver bustier, the studded black leather collar, and the elegantly coiffed, jet-black curls of her hair, done up in a fifties-style bouffant.
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That, plus at least the suggestion Paige is busty, is about all there is. I actually remember why this happened now - I was basing her image on a picture that my patron sent to me. It's one of those "I have a clear picture in
my head and don't realize it's not on the page" things. Something I usually catch, or a beta reader catches for me...