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Unread 12-23-2017   #2
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Re: Ranma fanfic tg by apsm.

Well, overall it feels very rushed even if it's far superior to most things out there (Oh "X" happened, better get mah tits out). As for the psychological horror you tried to create... It's completely absent; there isn't a shred of anything remotely scary going on. because his mentality isn't very well established. Basically, it's something like "It's scary to him because reasons".

A good try.
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