[Xodiac]

First, the good: There's some decent-to-good art here, and I like the story being told.

Now the bad: Your scanner isn't very good. Or possibly you just need to make your lines darker on the paper. There are a lot of dropped pixels, making it look very sketchy. Worse, it makes the speech bubbles very hard to read. It doesn't help that much of the comic is in cursive, so we not only have to deceipher your handwriting, we only have about 2/3 of your handwriting to deceipher. I suspect the reason you've received no comments 3 days after you posted this is because it's just so hard to read.

The good thing is that these problems are easy to fix. Make your lines darker so the scanner picks them up better, and/or get a new scanner. And write your text in regular, non-cursive lettering.