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Originally Posted by danio13
It seems no one likes Sv-los to comment about him. Sad
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Umm... I read the story probably a day after it was first posted and just finished two others. Not a bad attempt at writing, but there's definitely more room for improvement. A better plot, adding a plot twist and better tf development with more descriptions with regard to senses. But I guess he's writing the length based on the commissioner, so it's limited to the word count.
Nevertheless, everyone improves with practice.
And I'll be glad to see more stories from him and perhaps get a commission in future.