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Originally Posted by Captain Ash
Interesting story.
I like the way you've described the fury and the human world.
Also how Rose describes things from her point of view.
It reminds me a bit of the point'n'click game Inherit the Earth.
I've enjoyed reading this story, except for the last part.
It went a little too fast and I'm not into diapers.
I like also the drawings.
The artist did a great job on the face expressions.
Greetings
Captain Ash
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Thank you for the critique Ash.
I think there's going to be a long line of these since I know my boyfriend got one of me and Alyssa.
But yeah, I agree this was a bit short. But this is more practice for the three/four shrunken women novels I was planning on writing.
So any and all feed back is welcome on these exercises.
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