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JasonSlayer · 02-02-2016

Well, how about we call this a first draft? You do have a good premise and well-written shrinking, but it feels a little too "stream of consciousness".

Maybe try going into a bit more detail on a thing or two here and there.

I'm just saying, both as a writer and a shrinking fetishist.

02-02-2016	#2
JasonSlayer Frequent Poster Join Date: Apr 2008 Posts: 154	Re: "Hello Cathryn" Chapter 1 [Crappy SAW Story] Well, how about we call this a first draft? You do have a good premise and well-written shrinking, but it feels a little too "stream of consciousness". Maybe try going into a bit more detail on a thing or two here and there. I'm just saying, both as a writer and a shrinking fetishist.