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Originally Posted by Anotherfetishguy
Really good, thanks for sharing!
My only suggestion is to focus a little more on the out of clothes process (specifically shoes but thats me).
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Unfortunately I'm not skilled at such things.
But I can give it a try, no promises.
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Originally Posted by Captain Ash
I really liked the teasing parts. 
Just one thing:
I'm not a Lara Croft fan and had no idea who this Edward Price was.
Even a quick search in google was fruitless.
So a little more introductions to the characters would be nice, because I had no idea how he looks like and how he usually behaves.
But I got the impression that he is quite a coward.
Thanks for sharing.
Greetings
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Edward Price was a name I made up. Though the last name Price I got from Vincent Price.
Yeah introductions didn't cross my mind. Good thing this is only a third draft. I wasn't fully satisfied with it yet. Though the original idea was for a commission that grew to big.
Thank you both for the feed back. I was starting to think this thread was a mistake. Maybe at some point I can work on draft 4.