Hey Ash,
One thing I like is the combination of AR and AP; I like a good mix of those in a story. You have also put more thought into your plot, which is something I don't do very well. I like to write about the transformation itself, and my plots are usually barebones. One thing I would suggest is maybe lengthening your description of the transformations a little, which is something I like to do. I like your descriptions, and for me they'd be better with just a little more meat in them. I do hope to see more soon.
