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Originally Posted by Captain Ash
For those who have never read "little by little", I'd describe why the girl are shrinking.
I agree with the others that the ending was not great, especially since I'm not a fan of vore.
A little more detail why Becky wanted to shrink Jessica that badly would be nice.
I prefer stories where characters have a motive why they want to shrink someone.
Lust? Revenge? Teaching her a lesson or just for fun?
Its these little details.
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Agreed with Captain here. Treating the shrinking as a fully fleshed out comeuppance can make the shrinking that much more interesting. Say if Jessica had used to bully Becky, or had done some thing unforgivable to her that warranted this response.
Either way the murder is a bit of a turnoff, but I totally get the setting of a girl being shrunk by a rival. It's very sexually enticing, especially if the girl shrinking finds out she likes it!