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catfish27
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Re: The Breast Expansion Story Club Updates

Seems like it could have used a little editing and a once-over look at the formatting of the finished file. For one, it looks really hard to read if proper nouns such as "Earth" and "Mars" aren't properly capitalized throughout. (The version of the story on The Overflowing Bra looks fine on that score -- maybe it was edited by someone else at some point?)

And then there's the line that appears without spaces, "Marypunchedinthecommandforthecomputer"...
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