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Originally Posted by Raso719
It's scattered, which I guess is expected. I had a hard time figuring out where some scenes started and ended. I do think you should try ro give a slightly better sense of her size at times. Let it happen slower and work it out more.
Final suggestion is a personal preference but don't give her a size limit and definitely throw in some in person teasing between the main character and another girl where that girl makes her feel incredibly small.
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Sasha herself has a limit... but her main rival, the villain of the story is going to actually push her past her 1" limit. I wanted Sasha to feel like she could be safe in knowing she was never going to shrink past that. Jenny changes that.
Thank you for the feedback Raso. I'll take another crack at this and see what I get.
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