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Originally Posted by Raso719
Yeah I wanted to write a story about one of those A-hole guys who have a girl wrapped around his finger and how it would effect the girl. I think I went too far and definitely dropped the ball at the end.
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I would agree.
Honestly, I think you could've gotten away with the plot twist - it's cruel, but effective - if you hadn't then added on murder. That's the deal-breaker for me.